Hello Bloggers these are my sick sentences : I flew through the air. There were people watching me from the stands. I hit the ground
These are the sentences that I need to improve here are my new sentences:
Zooming through the air the shotput went further and further until it dropped BANG! It hit the floor making a dent in the ground. People Surrounding and watching me made me get a bit nervous as I pushed the shot put with all of my might making a win for it. Hitting the ground with a dent in it winning as the crowd cheered wildly.
Wow it sounded like that actually happened and it was like you were there.
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Kia Ora Charlotte. Thanks for your comment a challenge that I faced when doing this was that describing what it will feel like in that moment.
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Ariella-brooke
Hi Ariella-Brooke. I like your description and how you used great words.
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Talofa isabella. Thanks for your comment a challenge that I faced when doing this was that describing what it will feel like in that moment.
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Ariella-brooke